Friday Fictioneers 100 Word Flash Fiction Challenge: The Grand Tour


(c) 2014 Bjorn RudbergEvery Friday authors worldwide gather around the virtual fireside of Rochelle Wisoff and share stories of 100 words, prompted by a common photograph, and exchange constructive criticism. Readers’ comments are also welcome. This week’s photo has been provided by Bjorn Rudberg. Thanks Bjorn!

The Grand Tour

I went travelling. The Grand Tour, they called it. All the rich young men went and marvelled at ruins, as fashion dictated.

My guide told me a tale of one youth, who, unfulfilled by ruin, ventured further than fashion and found himself amongst mountains, in a snow storm which died into a cradling mist, then lifted, revealing to the boy walls and tall towers, girdling gardens of rill and incense trees, a sacred river plunging to the sea.

I asked my guide what was this place.

“The folly of a great king.”

“And what of the boy?”

“He became a child.”

(c) Ann Isik 2014
100 words

Acknowledgements:
Kubla Khan; Samuel Taylor Coleridge, (1772–1834), courtesy The Poetry Foundation

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24 Responses to Friday Fictioneers 100 Word Flash Fiction Challenge: The Grand Tour

  1. Sarah Ann says:

    Beautifully evocative. Love the middle paragraph pulling us in and painting that picture in contrast to the later short fact giving lines. As for ‘unfulfilled by ruin’ – what a state to be in. Great tale. Glad to hear in your replies to others that your shoulder continues to improve.

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  2. subroto says:

    Beautiful and poetic. Just like being in Xanadu. 🙂

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  3. Ann, I’m glad to hear your shoulder is healing at a fast rate. Lovely story with great description. I could see the mists rising and the “walls and tall towers” appearing. Well written. 🙂 —Susan

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  4. plaridel says:

    as always in a tour, somebody will venture out from the group with unpredictable consequences. 🙂

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  5. K.Z. says:

    love the poetic take on the prompt. i saw the other comments, i hope you feel better soon 🙂

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  6. A story within a story, beautifully done.

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  7. draliman says:

    I love your description in this piece, and the line “ventured further than fashion” following on from it being the fashionable thing to do.

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  8. Elizabeth says:

    Beautiful, I love the poetry style.

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  9. The depth of your story is amazing..the inclusion of Coleridge is just amazing.. Loved that reference…

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  10. julespaige says:

    Nice. I’m not at Friday Fictioneers every week. But I did post last week.
    Thanks for visiting my short verse site.

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  11. Dear Ann,

    I’m pleased to read that your shoulder’s getting better. Nicely done on your story as well. Poetic.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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    • AnnIsikArts says:

      Thank you, Rochelle. I am limited as to what I can do, so the story is not last for once! The last time I FF’ed I couldn’t lift my wrist from the keyboard to write, but now I can type normally.

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  12. Sandra says:

    You’re early this week. Hope the shoulder is healing nicely. Loved your story, it had a magic of its own.

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    • AnnIsikArts says:

      Thanks Sandra. I’m in the middle of re-reading Reeva as I write, alliteratively. Yes, my shoulder gets better daily. I’m glad that I managed to make some sort of sense in my story this week, (again writing alliteratively).

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