Friday Fictioneers: In the Moment


(c) Bjorn Rudberg

(c) Bjorn Rudberg

Every Friday authors worldwide gather around the virtual fireside of Rochelle Wisoff and share stories of 100 words, prompted by a common photograph, and exchange constructive criticism. Readers’ comments are also welcome. This week’s photo has been provided by  fellow Friday Fictioneer Bjorn Rudberg. Thank you, Bjorn.

Here’s the story Bjorn’s photo inspired.

In the Moment

“The soul of man is like to music;
From Heaven it cometh
To Heaven it riseth
And then returneth to earth,
Forever alternating.”
“Goethe,” he returned, in an undertone … but I think it’s water, not music?”
Someone shushed them.
She considered the musicians – one, old, strung out the past; the youth fingered towards future. Each would have troubles. Yet here, in this dusky moment, each was dependent on the other’s fingerings for the notes weaving the melody wending heavenward.
She began to speak, but his hand smothered hers.
“Be in the moment,” he said, “it’s all we have.”

(c) Ann Isik
99 words

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18 Responses to Friday Fictioneers: In the Moment

  1. Ann, this is so beautiful.. if we only could stay in that moment a little longer.. each and every human spend one extra moment in that moment. We would have a peaceful world…

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  2. Nan Falkner says:

    Good story – have a good week! Nan 🙂

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  3. plaridel says:

    you couldn’t have ended it any better. great story.

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    • AnnIsikArts says:

      Thank you. On reflection, I think it probably also highlights something of the ‘artistic temperament’ – that of standing outside events and analysing. It can be that we forget to ‘be in the moment’ ourselves. 🙂

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  4. The ‘moment’ is perfectly captured 🙂

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  5. Hi, Ann. I was just about to close this window, then decided I should see if there were any more stories. And I found yours. I like your descriptions of the players and the way you showed their interdependence. And bringing Goethe into your story, too? 🙂 I found myself re-reading to get the full effect.

    One small missing quotation mark between “undertone” and “But”.

    janet

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    • AnnIsikArts says:

      Thanks, Janet. The quote came along just when I’d about decided I couldn’t write a story for this one. I’ll check out my typo – I wrote it in the middle of the night and fell asleep at my laptop! Ann

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  6. Ann, this is a beautiful piece. This line -“one, old, strung out the past; the youth fingered towards future” absolutely sings.

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  7. “Be in the moment, it’s all we have”. Wow. Somehow, I find this story really poignant. Thank you for this. Cheers! 🙂

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  8. Ann, This is very lovely, weaving Goethe’s words into your story. A very creative use of the prompt. Well done.

    Susan

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  9. Dear Ann,

    Profound and lovely. The moment really is all we have.

    Shalom,

    Rochelle

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